Wake Skating Poem (Help) 2nd part

CrzyTexan · Frontside 180 Joined: 05 May 2006 Posts: 475

Alright so for English class we had to write a poem about your favorite "Specific Color" and tie somthing into it. I picked Sky Blue and put wake skating into it. Tell me what you think honestly.

Wake skating in blue skys

Blue skys, cool water, warm air
I have never seen the sky so clear
The water was like glass and I breaking through it
The sky was closer than ever and it was me flying through it
Ive never felt the blue sky so near
This only happens when im gliding through the air
I then looked down in the water to see if anything was there
All I see is the blue sky gleaming off it so clear
I then sprayed water up into the air
There was no blue sky to be seen anywhere
As the water fell- so did I
I came up to see the blue sky then shining in my eye
I got back up and tried again
The blue sky this time was with me until the end
Throughout the day the blue sky was there
It never failed me and it was always near

xXxcaliwakeskaterxXx · Backside 180 Joined: 18 Oct 2006 Posts: 533

nice poem. wakeskating is not something you hear about in poetry. what grade did you get on it?

CrzyTexan · Frontside 180 Joined: 05 May 2006 Posts: 475

i turn it in tomarrow she said it was a "great" idea. i was being "creative"

Rick O'shay · Posted: Dec 07, 2006 10:10 am Post subject:

thats so good : ) A+

jonnyUTAH · Backside 180 Joined: 27 Aug 2004 Posts: 1951

A+ Agreed.

"The sky was closer than ever" - I like that. Blur the distinction between self, the sky, air, water, and the sky's reflection. Wakeskating as a vehicle to bring something far away (the sky) closer and closer until it is within you.....cleaver!

Wakeskating on glass with reflection definately brings self, water, air, sky together....I think you've done a good job of portraying that...

-=AlexXx=- · Posted: Dec 07, 2006 12:27 pm Post subject:

man, i did one like that in 11th grade! mine was about the blue skys and wakeskating also, but i called it water dancing... metaphores Very Happy

thats a killer poem, ima look for mine.

CrzyTexan · Frontside 180 Joined: 05 May 2006 Posts: 475

ok well now i have to make a poster of all these different pictures that goes with my poem so do any of yall have a website with some sick pictures or sumttin or sum nice lake pics?

RedXIII · Posted: Dec 07, 2006 10:34 pm Post subject:

lol thats a badass poem

Jesse · Posted: Dec 07, 2006 11:57 pm Post subject:

Here are some lake shots.

CrzyTexan · Frontside 180 Joined: 05 May 2006 Posts: 475

thanks i got a 95 ont he whole thing Smile

! it was a test grade too

spadedout41 · Frontside 180 Joined: 21 Jul 2005 Posts: 441

yahoo.....!!!